http://www.fabianschonholz.com/2007/08/30/embracing-changes-part-i/ Don't Be So Serious Mon, 28 Apr 2008 17:15:53 -0300 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.8 hourly 1 http://www.fabianschonholz.com/2007/08/30/embracing-changes-part-i/comment-page-1/#comment-50 elizabeth Tue, 04 Sep 2007 14:51:17 +0000 http://www.fabianschonholz.com/2007/08/30/embracing-changes-part-i/#comment-50 As the wife mentioned in the blog entry, I feel it is my duty to further encourage this entry in the direction I was referring to initially. When I said that I like to read the entries that have emotion in them, I actually meant the blogger - Fabian - feeling the emotion. This entry, while an amazing first draft, is looking at the emotion from the safe vantage point of time and space. There is no actual feeling happening, and so, unfortunately, the entry is very dry. The topic is perfect for an emotional entry. You just need to pull down a couple layers of gauze between yourself and your actual feelings at the time. Instead of reporting "Feelings rush to us", own the feeling, for example..."It was really hard not speaking the language, every time I had to open my mouth to communicate, it was so much effort just to say the simplest thing" - that has a little active emotion in it. The sentence, "feeling rush to us" is not only a very weak description, it isn't even about you, it's about the safe, proverbial "us". It's pretty much the ultimate cop out. It's safe. What I really was asking for was ... hermit crabs running amok. ducks out of their rows. pure emotional mayhem - the way life happens. I will be awaiting the next draft with an open heart and an eager mind. As the wife mentioned in the blog entry, I feel it is my duty to further encourage this entry in the direction I was referring to initially. When I said that I like to read the entries that have emotion in them, I actually meant the blogger – Fabian – feeling the emotion. This entry, while an amazing first draft, is looking at the emotion from the safe vantage point of time and space. There is no actual feeling happening, and so, unfortunately, the entry is very dry. The topic is perfect for an emotional entry. You just need to pull down a couple layers of gauze between yourself and your actual feelings at the time. Instead of reporting “Feelings rush to us”, own the feeling, for example…”It was really hard not speaking the language, every time I had to open my mouth to communicate, it was so much effort just to say the simplest thing” – that has a little active emotion in it. The sentence, “feeling rush to us” is not only a very weak description, it isn’t even about you, it’s about the safe, proverbial “us”. It’s pretty much the ultimate cop out. It’s safe. What I really was asking for was … hermit crabs running amok. ducks out of their rows. pure emotional mayhem – the way life happens. I will be awaiting the next draft with an open heart and an eager mind.

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